Fractured Haiku/Senryu

A place for those addicted to 5/7/5 or a more cynical, darkly funny version...Come get your fix.

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  • Angharad

    I love that, Daddieo! What a wonderful way to express it.
  • Daddieo

    dark and yellow skies

    future to be determined

    let it come I say

     

    I hope all are safe and secure this eventful day on the Eastern shores and in New England.  Be well.  Be safe.

  • Scott Williamson

    A tribute...
    iCan

    iWill
    Pick up the pieces
    When things fall apart
    And puzzle out
    A prettier picture.

    iAm
    Succeed(ing) still despite
    When rocks are thrown
    And hit their mark
    A bruised brilliance. 

    iShould
    Throw caution to the wind
    When faced with a choice
    And aim at transcendence
    A lunar legacy.

    iMight
    Discover greater reflect
    When faced with obstacles
    And still to persevere
    A sparkling struggle.

    iMust
    Play games with fate
    When kicked with doubt
    And start to ascertain
    A willing wonder. 

    iWill
    Draw inspiration
    When faced with blocks
    And carry on
    A daring dream. 

    iCan
    Because you did.

     

    Written By: jayarrarr.writes@gmail.com

    — — —
    Update: Hear here.

  • Quinn

    I saw this on the internet today :-))

     

  • Daddieo

    come to me said she

    prromises untold, and more

    only, you must fall

  • metub4

    welcome  to  BB

        a new member to haiku

             write on new sister

  • Angharad

    Hi BB! Thanks for joining us.

    As you will see, this is a place to express yourself without much restriction. If you're a haiku purist, I'm afraid we transgress almost all the guidelines. But we certainly do enjoy ourselves!

    So jump on in and get those creative juices flowing in 5/7/5!

    i apologize

    noble tradition altered...

    bastardized haiku

  • Angharad

    HAHAHAHAH!!!

    NOPE...nothing at all. I was lying.

  • Daddieo

    yes lonely in here

    stalwart strong but now gone on

    nothing ever lasts

  • Daddieo

    I do

  • Angharad

    not dead quite yet, D.

    wind gutters the flame at times

    but embers still burn

  • Daddieo

    I, for one, am very grateful to hear that...allows me to hold on to beliefs I find essential.  Thanks, A.  I hope you are well...and loved.

  • Risha Namaste

    I longed for summer

    the breezy maestro of heat

    the cool of the nights

  • Angharad

    Greetings, Risha! 

    summer invades me
    rose sweet mysteries blossom
    in warm fertile soil

  • Angharad

    Welcome back, Bruton! I'm thrilled to see your wonderful words.

  • Scott Williamson

    rain soft on windshield

    travel weary but grateful

    for returning home

  • metub4

    has been awhile Scott

    nice that your musings return

    write on brother

  • Angharad

    wonderful saykath

    thank you for joining us here

    enriching our world

  • Angharad

    hey beatnik baby

    long time no see your bongos

    so glad that you're back

  • Angharad

    Oh!  I hope Sophie is doing better now, SayKath! 

    If you want to write haiku about Sophie, and other pets, that are easily accessible, there's a discussion called "Animal Companions."

    I just wrote a quick haiku in it so that it would come to the front page... 

  • Angharad

    :>), SK!

    I'm such a glutton for everybody's haiku! I hate it when they disappear from the comment wall so quickly.

  • metub4

    the richest person =

    not one who has most, needs least

    life is like coffee

    http://www.flickspire.com/_videos/flash/LILC/LILC.swf

  • metub4

    well for sure  SayKath

    links are in public domain

    what I write's for all

  • Scott Williamson

    Love is a snowmobile...

    racing across the tundra and then suddenly it flips over, pinning you underneath.

    At night, the ice weasels come.

  • Angharad

    SCOTT!

    Happy to see you--at least, whatever's left after the ice weasels... <3

  • BellaG

    Their stormy drama.

    Swirling monsoons scream at me.

    Retreat to shelter.

  • metub4

    hello BellaG

    nice to see your posting here

    hope there's more to come

  • Angharad

    Welcome, BellaG! As metub4 said, it's wonderful to see you here!

    evocative words
    creating sharp images...
    please keep it coming!

  • metub4

    hi Doga Seven

    welcome to our haiku group

    write on my brother

  • BellaG

    Thank you for the warm welcome, Metub4 and Angharad. I do appreciate it! Poetry can be such an emotional release when needed. I am grateful for this group.
  • BellaG

    To be the eagle
    That flies above the stormy
    Selfish rants. Deep sigh.
  • BellaG

    Outdoors the weather
    Is frightful. Dream of blue skies.
    El Niño go away!
  • metub4

    grateful for new blood

    our lifelines become stronger

    more the merrier

  • metub4

    Greetings BellaG.  check out some of the discussions above............

  • Angharad

    I agree, BellaG!

    If you post in one of the discussions, your haiku won't eventually disappear from the front page, and we can write and comment directly to it. Be sure to click on "view all" because there are MANY more discussions than show on this page. And, if you don't see one you like, please start a new one. That would be exciting!

    XOXOXOXOXOX

     

  • Angharad

    Welcome Doga Seven48!

    Jump right in and have fun. There are a gazillion discussion topics as prompts (be sure to click "view all"), and if you don't see a discussion you like, start a new one!

    exotic turkey...
    I look forward to reading
    istanbul haiku

  • Doga Seven48

    Thank you, mutb4 for the welcome, 2 days ago, my wife & I came back home to Istanbul, after six weeks of long visit to India, such great country full of culture and history, diffrent places and colorful people with many many believes, such warm sunny there , wow Goa, and Cochin 30-35C.

    Now it is cold and snowing, below zero celsius. 

  • Doga Seven48

    Thank you Angharad for the welcome.

  • metub4

    Martin Luther King

    champion of civil rights

    equal one and all

  • metub4

    Yes, today's Pi Day

    That is 3.14.16  (3.1459 rounded)

    numbers are fun too !

  • PartTimeBrewer

    Dawn creeping thru oaks

    Cardinals courting their mates

    Oh look a squirrel

  • Angharad

    Ah, PTB! I didn't see you here. 

    Thank you for your evocative haiku!

    It's too good to be overlooked. Next time you post (and PLEASE post more), would you click on "view all" and find (or create) a discussion that fits and post it there? (Like, the discussion "Summer" would have been good for this one.) Haiku posted on the comment wall are easy to overlook and eventually scroll away to oblivion. 

  • PartTimeBrewer

    I just haven't taken the time yet to go thru all the discussions

    I really find it odd and ironic that I am writing in the genre of poetry. Reading poetry usually leaves me frustrated and feeling "why don't they just come out and say what they mean" Any effort to write it comes out like a science treatise set to rhyme and metre. And I'm cranky that the form prevents me from saying what I mean in a direct fashion. I really think it's a sign of mild Asbergers.

    However Haikus may be different. The form seems to force a simple directness with a sensory experience. Just what I am trying to achieve with mindfulness.

  • Angharad

    I TOTALLY agree, PTB!  That's exactly why we broke all the rules here, except the most basic (Western) requirement of 5/7/5. It's also why I created what I call the "serial" haiku, which is a series of related haiku which allow you to tell a fuller story.

    Haiku does force you to distill a thought/feeling. It's direct, quick, spontaneous, and allows one to "get it out" without belaboring the product. It really made writing poetry accessible to a lot of folks here who otherwise wouldn't have been interested--or so many said.

    Although I and Metub4 have essentially been alone here since the exodus away from TBD, if you look at the first pages of any discussion, you'll see work from many members. It was really fun and lively.

    And, sorry, but I've been using the haiku group in these "empty" years as a way to work out a huge loss in my life--so, if you read any of my more recent haiku, you'll see mostly depressing themes from me. Before then, I wrote a lot of odes to my love, who was really the focus of any social media page I had anyway.  

    Anyway, please write on, and use this place to express anything you wish.  

  • metub4

    greetings PTB

    great to have you with us here

    enjoy and write on

  • Angharad

    Welcome, Lip Service!

    fresh blood to savor
    dip your pen in and feed us--
    LS runs screaming

    HAHAHA! Couldn't help myself. Halloween is coming...

  • Steven Willy Rachlin

    MIND GIRL - Haiku



    I knew a young girl
    In the Land of Memory.
    Lost in precious time,

                 ~
    And the swirls of mist.
    Mountains of Experience,
    Ranges have been built.

                ~
    I sleep in valleys.
    I exult with the sunrise
    From the tops of Peaks.

                ~
    High above the Land,
    Stretched out behind me, so far,
    Love fades into Time.

                ~
    The young girl stands there,
    Not quite obscured by the fog.
    Forever Lovely.
  • Angharad

    That's wonderful and evocative, Steven--glad to see you back! As we get older, those lost in the "Land of Memory" become more numerous, don't they? 

    the sun at your back
    your silhouette beckons me
    i can't see your face

  • PartTimeBrewer

    "A haiku is the expression of a temporary enlightenment in which we see into the life of things."  ~  R. H. Blyth

  • Daddieo

    Here is today's news

    In the form of a haiku

    The ship is still stuck